liquid-mojo :: 07 August, 2003
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Layout: (20/20) self-designed
Javascripts, ay? Black, white and blue/purple, very gorgeous and creative indeed; but why does the sexy lady dancing up there link to your profile? In general, I like the witty layout despite it being a little too busy to my liking... Wait! Excuse me, was I supposed to read those tiny white texts? Oh no, please kill me.
- The dancing girl used to have an alt description saying somthing like
"Visit my profile, the bootie is hypnotizing you to do so..." when
you hovered your mouse over it, but since that particular javascript does
not allow alt tags I guess the meaning is lost a little. I may link it to
something more "appropriate" as soon as I can think of it, perhaps
my "erotica" entry, I'm not sure yet. There are alot of things
going on in my layout I do admit. I tried to make it as simple as possible,
but trying to fit all that information even in a 1024 x 768 space can be
daunting to say the least. I'm sorry about the small white font. I've played
with larger fonts but I made a sacrifice and went with more squeezing
information in a smaller amount of space. The font is actually "off
white" so the contrast isn't as severe, but I may make it a darker
shade and I'll at least play with the idea of a larger font in my next
redesign. I'm glad you didn't take any points off despite your annoyance of
"little white texts".
Content: (48/50)
The compliments:
You know, I was wondering that when you said you're undersexed, you were not really undersexed. I thought being undersexed was to have subnormal sexual desire or potency or something along the line, yet you seem to be entirely the opposite. Ha! Just teasing you. I do know what you're trying to say.
- You actually made me giggle there, but really you shouldn't tease a
sexually starved man like myself, it's like poking a stick at a sleeping
beast. ;)
Your writing is often deep, humorous, honest - and sexy. You told us that the "diary" prior to this one was a "cocklog", so I knew it was going to be full of sex (or lack thereof - quoting from you). You didn't hold back anything in your entries, and you actually said that you wouldn't lie to it; very bold. I especially love your 100 things. It's like your different "phases" all rolled in one, and I definitely know a lot more about you. It's good that you started to talk about something else rather than sex since May, and they've been the same frankness and straightforwardness.
- I'm glad you noticed my attempts at broadening the subject matter of my
diary. Honesty is very cathartic for me so you can pretty much count on me
being open and honest in my diary about sex or whatever else happens to be
on my mind.
Pardon my ignorance; who's Russell Wong? I asked my whole family and none of us (we're from Hong Kong, by the way) have heard of him. Oy! Nobody said sex was bad, but you really talked too much about it in the past. I like this one, you write just like the way I do sometimes. Okay...
- There's probably a different film culture in HK but the most popular
movies I've seen Russell Wong in is the Joy Luck Club and Romeo
Must Die. Perhaps a Google search of his filmography may help you find a
movie he starred in that you might be familiar with. As for sex the talk, I
guess it all depends on how you look at it. My "Zen" response is
that I talked about sex in the exact amount I needed to talk about it. It
was on my mind, the feelings, the frustration, the yearning and in the
absence of sexual gratification I needed to let all of that out in some way,
so I did so in my writing. If you had any entries even remotely similar to
my "planet derrick" one, I will definitely give your diary a
visit. ;) And yes I do silly things with pictures when I'm bored, but you
really have to see that movie to understand that whole thing. =p
Other personal favourites: this about your father/childhood and this for your cousin. Beautiful.
- I don't know what to say here except thank you...
The criticisms:
Although I know you've stopped talking about it as much now, I read all your older entries and this was what I thought: Did you seriously need sex that much? Did sex take up that much of your life? It seemed to me that you maintain a good relationship with most women just so you could have sex with them. I didn't like the "you gotta cough before you get off..." and "it's almost over..." (both on April 13) entries at all. Some people might find it funny, but I'm rather offended by it. I also felt unconfortable reading this; but I guess you were being honest to yourself so I cannot complain.
- Yes, I want sex, I love sex and I need sex and though I have chosen to
vary my subject matter and my writing style in lieu of a more mature
"voice" in my diary sex is still a very strong and a very real
need within me. I won't deny that I do enjoy sex physically, if you
read carefully however, sex to me is much more than a just a physical act.
For me it is the ultimate expression and the physical manifestation of my
need to connect with someone else on a profound level. I won't deny that
good sex would be a significant contributing factor in my desire to sustain
a relationship, but I think I have reached a level of maturity where I would
need to connect on other levels aside from the physical. A broken heart is
nothing new to me and I know that one of the keys to my happiness is to find
someone that I can relate to on all levels, physically, intellectually, emotionally
and spiritually. And yes I know I can get quite graphic with the sexual
content so I'm sorry for the discomfort. This is the main reason I put the disclaimer,
in recognition that some of my content can be a little overwhelming for the
casual reader. What can I say? Except that I do have those moments of
extreme horniness and sometimes I just have to let that part of my psyche
take over, no excuses, no regrets...
Grammar and Spellings: (7/10)
Your grammar is perfect, but you have a couple typos, spelling errors and misplaced apostrophes in your entries (especially the earlier ones). "Undersexxed" on the picture is also a misspelling. Others used more frequently: anyhoo, thier, wierd, etc.
- I try to use a spell checker but sometimes I just get lazy. I know I
should use it more often and I'll keep that in mind. I always proofread my
entries at least once and I usually make minor grammatical changes to make
the reading more "flowing". I must have fell asleep when they were
going over the spelling rules of words containing "ie" I guess
it's not always "I before E, except after C". I try not to use
slang in my diary but the "colloquial" in me has a tendency of
slipping out and "anyhoo" is one of my favorite colloquialisms. I
purposely misspelled "undersexxed" in that picture to add emphasis
on how messed up my "condition" is I suppose. =p I do have to
commend you on your ability to catch all of these infractions. I'm not sure
if English is your primary language but from what I read in your diary you
do it very well.
Errors: (9/10)
The pictures didn't show up on this and this page, there was a sudden tiny horizontal scroll on this page (or is it me?), all your next links go to index.html from this page onwards, and because of your clever font size of choice I almost didn't notice that you have entries that have no capitalisations at all. Nothing too major though, I think.
- UGH! the dreaded red X's oh how I loathe them. I'll have to make a
mental note to fix those broken image links when I get a chance. Methinks
the next links that point to the index.html page are diaryland glitches. I'm
hoping they will fix themselves, and yes I've sacrificed capital letters for
the sake of brevity and flow of thought. I try not to do that but sometimes
I can't help but sneak in the occasional "quick and dirty" entry
during office hours or at school.
Updates: (5/5)
Your writer's block, parties, etc. - you explained why you didn't/couldn't update.
- I'm glad you caught that, very perceptive...
Contact: (5/5)
Guestbook, guestmap, notes, email and AIM.
Bonus: +4
Like all your lovely extras, but your tiny, tiny, tiny, tiny font really put me off. Why do you people hate me so much? =(
- I don't hate you, really I don't. It was a design compromise, believe
me. :)
Additional Comments:
This review will go into one of your entries along with your comments, right? Oooh.
- So you predict the future as well as do reviews. I admire a woman of
many talents... ;) I guess you don't need a crystal ball to predict the
obvious. =p
Newest entry read: rougereview.html (07/08/03)
Total: 98/100 - oops, I thought it'd be a 100+
- I guess it can't all be perfect. =p Still, to Vickie: I
really appreciate the close-to-perfect high score, all the bonus points and
especially all the time and effort in making such a detailed review despite
all my sexual writings...
Reviewer: Vickie
